There are several effects of global warming. First of all, due to the increase of ocean’s temperature, Antarctic Pole’s and Arctic Pole’s glacier would melt quickly and that leads to the rise of sea level which may submerge the coastal regions and cause the deflation of land area that influences the environment and even may bring about wars. Moreover, global warming makes the extreme climate such as rainstorm, drought and typhoons happen more frequently and also increases the loss of human life and property. Furthermore, because the temperature rises, many areas face drought which causes serious desertification and that causes the grain yield to decrease; consequently, numerous people starve to death. All of these effects mean that global warming influences the environment materially.
climate(是指熱和冷的那種氣候吧!)我覺得用 disaster 比較好~
回覆刪除用mean怪怪的~
其他都不錯喔!!!
* Antarctic Pole’s and Arctic Pole’s glacier would melt quickly and that leads to~
回覆刪除→the glaciers in Antarctic Pole and Arctic Pole(參考看看嚕~)would melt quickly，問一下你的that 指的是冰河ㄇ?如果是那我覺得and不用寫，that leads to ~當關代。
很順寫的很好:)
回覆刪除First of all, due to the increase of ocean’s temperature, Antarctic Pole’s and Arctic Pole’s glacier would melt quickly and that leads to the rise of sea level which may submerge the coastal regions and cause the deflation of land area that influences the environment and even may bring about wars.
回覆刪除天阿這句也太長了!害我以為是雅思的文章= =
能不能稍微斷個2.3句...
其他沒有問題:)
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