2011年6月1日 星期三

Discussing Cause-2

Over the past 150 years there has been a huge increase in population and there are some reasons why this situation happens.  First of all, we have advances in medicine and health care; hence, more and more people can be saved from dying and they can receive better care than ever.  Another reason we have better sanitation so that there are less infections spreading.  Furthermore, people improved farming methods that produce more and better food; consequently, people could have healthier bodies.  Finally, there are fewer infant deaths and more people living longer; as a result, there are more and more people living in the world.  It’s for all the above-mentioned reasons that find why population increases.

7 則留言:

  1. Another reason we have better sanitation so that there are less infections spreading這句我看不懂...
    infant deaths是嬰兒死亡率嗎?
    如果是的話要不要改成infant mortality?
    其他大致沒問題了~~

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  2. Another reason 改成
    Another reason is that...
    最後一點和第一點好像~
    都屬於醫療進步的部分~

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  3. Another reason we have better sanitation so that there are less infections spreading.
    →Another reason is that we have better sanitation~.

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  4. 除了前面都有提到的Another reason is that
    我就找不到其他康門了

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  5. Another reason 後面似乎少了is that
    there are some reasons why this situation happens
    我覺得reasons跟why中間是不是放個for會更好?(只是單純個人感覺)

    開頭要有空格喔!!

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  6. 我的也和國雯一樣,其他都很好!

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