2011年5月25日 星期三

Expressing an Opinion-1

I'm not on the same page as those who oppose using the death penalty as a form of criminal punishment.  Although many people insist that using the death penalty is cruel, I strongly believe that the punishment can decrease the crime rate because by doing that, those who are going to commit crimes will stop to think before they do illegal things.  In addition, no one can argue against the fact that if we punish the criminals by using the death penalty, the victims won't worry that the criminals will hurt them again.  Moreover, too many criminals will commit the same crimes because thay think that what they did will not threaten their lives.  Consequently, it's for all the above-mentioned reasons that I believe we should use the death penalty as a form of criminal punishment.

7 則留言:

  1. 倒數第三行thay-->they
    內容很完整而且99%沒有錯誤!!!!!

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  2. 順暢~~~你是跟某位同學買一樣的肚子順暢藥嗎哈哈

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  3. * Although many people insist that using the death penalty is cruel,~
    妳是寫表「建議、要求等動詞」的句型,所以要改成→ Although many people insist that using the death penalty (should) be cruel,~.

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  4. 順暢~
    because by doing that會不會有點多餘???

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  5. 孟庭的意見好厲害=ˇ=
    除此之外文章沒有問題

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