2011年5月18日 星期三
Comparing-3
There are two reataurants, Kelly House and John House, which I have ever been to and I think there are several similarties between them. First of all, both Kelly House's dishes and John House's are cheaper. Their price ranges from one hundred dollars to two hundred dollars. Furthermore, the food quality is similar to the quality of John House. They alike offer us high quality food and the dishes taste delicious. Moreover, Kelly House's service is as good as John House's. Kelly House's waiters and waitress are always polite while they place the dishes on the table. Likewise, John House's stewards and stewardess are always careful. Next, the speed of serving food in Kelly House is fast like the speed of John House. We only have to wait less than ten minutes for the dishes. Both of the two restaurants are good restaurants.
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這句改成the food quality is similar to that of John House.可以避免字有重複唷~~
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Furthermore, the food quality is similar to the quality~ 後面的quality要不要改成it或that
回覆刪除*第三行的John House's are cheaper.→我覺得改成cheap
回覆刪除*Furthermore, the food quality is similar to the quality of John House.
→Futhermore, the food quality of the Kelly House is similar to that of John House.
*alike 當形容詞或副詞都放句尾。
*第六行的waitress 要加es→waitresses;steward和stewardess是指空服人員吧?!如果你還是要用這兩個單字那stewardess也要加上es!
*Next, the speed of serving food in Kelly House is fast like the speed of John House.看你要不要換成→Next, the speed of serving food in Kelly House is as fast as that in John House. 參考看看八!
the food quality is similar to the quality of John House.
回覆刪除後面得quality可以改成that
the speed of serving food in Kelly House is fast like the speed of John House.
也是同樣道理,後面改成that比較好
cheaper 要用cheap 吧!
回覆刪除要不要多用點代名詞~這樣Kelly House 和 John House就不會一直出現~
我看完覺得沒有什麼問題
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