2011年4月20日 星期三

My favorite season

Among the four seasons of a year, I like autumn most.  I like autumn for some reasons.  First of all, autumn brings cool wind and I always feel comfortable and cool.  When I walk along the street in autumn, I can feel relaxed.  Furthermore, the temperature in autumn is moderate and I would not feel sticky or cold.  Additionally, there is less damages in autumn.  But there is drought in summer and cold current in winter.  Finally, the weather is neither too hot and nor too cold.  Thus, we can do many outdoor activities without being worry about being sunburned or frostbitten.  I always enjoy autumn and autumn is my favorite season for these reasons.

7 則留言:

  1. I like autumn most. I like autumn for some reasons.要不要合在一起,比較不會有那麼多重複的字
    Additionally, there is less damages in autumn. But there is drought in summer and cold current in winter.
    改Unlike summer and winter, there always has drought and cold current.比較順的感覺~

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  2. Among the four seasons of a year, I like autumn most. I like autumn for some reasons.
    ~I like autumn most for some reasoms.比較不會太饒舌
    being "worried" about ( worry是動詞 )

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  3. being worry about
    worry→worried
    其他沒什麼問題
    轉折詞用的不錯~!good

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  4. 除了某些字(像autumn和cool)稍微有一直重複
    其他沒有問題唷!!
    文章還是短小精練阿~

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  5. ~I like autumn most. I like autumn for some reasons. =>I like autumn most for some reasons.這樣會不會比較順?
    I always enjoy autumn and autumn is my favorite season for these reasons. 第二個autumn要不要改it之類的

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  6. 第二行的and要不要改成so比較好???
    第四行there is less damages
    如果damages可數的話前面的less應該改為fewer喔
    其他都很棒唷~~~

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  7. 除了前2個autumn其餘的要不要改成it阿

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