There is a horror dream that I have ever had. In the dream, I went mountain climbing by myself and I didn't bring any food with me. When I was on the way to exit, I found I had got lost and it began to snow heavily. Then I felt something was following me. It was a monster, so I started to run in order to get rid of it. Worst of all, I was so hungry and cold that I didn't have energy to run. However, just at the moment when I was caught by the monster, a superman appeared. He defeated the monster and gave me a lot of food to eat. Later, when I finished eating the whole food, the superman took out a gun and shot me. Then I woke up with my heart beating quickly.
第四行的monste要改成"monster"喲!!
回覆刪除是monster唷:)
回覆刪除所以超人不是給你food是給你腳尾飯所以你要不要改成the food from funeral homes還是你要寫這個Sacrificial offering?
回覆刪除There is a horror dream 用was會不會比較好
回覆刪除I felt something was following me 我覺得 was可以省略對嗎 還是我錯= =
回覆刪除When I was on the way to exit的exit加the會比較好
回覆刪除monster拼錯了
回覆刪除energy 前面要不要多加一點形容詞增加自數??
回覆刪除enough 之類的
沒有什麼意見囉
回覆刪除大家都講完了^^