I come from Taiwan and I'm looking for a eastern girl who got lost several hours ago. Her name is Mary. She is a teenaged girl and she is at the age of seventeen. She is petite and a little thin. Her hair is long, light blond, and clurly. Her eyes are big and she wears glasses. The last time I saw her, she wore a white shirt and blue skirt. She speaks English fluently. I almost forget that she has a mole on her left face. When she smiles, her dimples will show up. If you see her, please tell me as soon as possible.
寫的很好但是你沒有寫聯絡方式跟電話我是要怎麼tell you呢
回覆刪除1.是"an" easten girl
回覆刪除2.如果改成She is a teenaged girl at the age of seenteen.會不會比較好呢?
3.最後一行的show up 有點怪怪的...
建議改成appear
恩恩同上=ˇ=
回覆刪除The last time I saw her後面可能要加個連接詞唷~
回覆刪除比如 The last time I saw her was yesterday when she wore ...........
內容很短但是很詳細喔:))
she wore a white shirt and blue skirt
回覆刪除blue前面應該要加個a
其他沒什麼問題!
The last time I saw her, she wore a white shirt and blue skirt.沒連接詞怪拐的...
回覆刪除然後沒有聯絡方式~~~
簡潔有力有通順,但可能有點太簡潔了因為我不知道怎麼聯絡你!!!!!
回覆刪除要記得加聯絡方式喔!
回覆刪除除此之外都很順啦!